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1、读后续写速成,五点爆破”法落点:浏览所给信息,确定大意主题重点:梳理已知段落,确定主要情节突破点:借助段落开头,确定续写内容亮点:刻画细节冲突,优美连表达基本点:做到首尾呼应,结构完整合理五步写作法流程示例阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Byth
2、etimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,Tmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tbhersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.She
3、suddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.Tom!sheCried.Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTbmandherfamily
4、.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tbhergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongerno
5、w,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgoto
6、anopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.STEPl落点:浏览所给信息,确定大意主题whoJane,TomwhatJanewaslostwhereInaforestwhenOneweekendinJulywhyAquarrelwithTom,herhusband文章大意Janewaslostintheforestforthreedaysandsurvivedintheend表达主题Janelearnedhowtocontrol
7、emotionsanddealwithconflictsSTEP2重点:梳理已知段落,确定主要情节主要情节beginning.startedtoquarrel.waslostdevelopment.keptmoving.hadtostopforthenight.Roseatthebreakofday.Begantowalkalongthestreamandhope.Climax(高潮)heardahelicopterending待定STEP3突破点:借助段落开头,确定续写内容研读续写段落的开头语Para.1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarka
8、gain.(切入点)Jane是如何熬过这个夜晚的?1. HowdidJanefeelthen?2. HowdidJanestrugglethroughthenight?3. Didshefallasleepandwhatdidshethinkof?ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup?Para.2(切入点)昨晚Jane没有被救,今天会发生什么?1. WasJanerescuedandwhorescuedJane?2. Howwassherescuedandhowdidshefeelthen?续写内容Para.1Jane是如何熬过那一夜晚的Para.2Jane是如何获救的STE
9、P4亮点:刻画细节冲突,优美连表达刻画细节冲突添加细节Jane在当晚和次日的动作,语言,心理描写以及对周围环境的描写。营造冲突1 .扩大JaIIe在夜晚内心的冲突(后悔与丈夫吵架)2 .渲染Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突(当晚“恶劣”环境与内心无助和恐惧的冲突;次日让直升机发现自己的困难与渴望被救的冲突)优美连贯表达Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Inthedreadfuldarkness,(一切都像准备好发动攻击的野兽)明喻+过去分词作定语(又累又怕)双形容词作状语,Janewasrootedtospot,unableto
10、utteraword.(如果我没有和汤姆吵架,我现在就不会被困在这里了)虚拟语气,ShethoughtOfherself(后悔的泪水模糊了她的眼睛)with的复合结构.(被恐惧包围着)过去分词作状语,Janeabandonedherselftodespairandfellasleep.uTom,isthatyou?”Shemurmured.4tTom,help!,Inherdream,(她看见一位男士张开双臂)现在分词作宾补towardsheratadistance.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.(尽管很沮丧)省略结构,Janedecidedtocontinuefor
11、cingherwayahead.However,shefoundithardtofindawayOUt,(这再次让她绝望)定语从句LFortunately,ahelicopterflewOverheadjustatthatmoment.(Jane太激动了,她立刻冲到岩石边)倒装结landclimbedontoiteagerly.(眼里闪耀着希望的光芒)独立主格结构,shewavedheryellowblousemadlytothehelicopter,(lI)(大声呼救)现在分词短语作伴随状语.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterspottedherandcametoherh
12、elp.(12)(当团聚的时候)省略结构,Janeandherhusbandhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmthlightoftherisingsun.STEP5基本点:做到首尾呼应,结构完整合理提升点:为了做到首尾呼应,使文章结构更加完整,考生可以在第二段的结尾回扣文章开头Jane与丈夫的争吵和冲突,充分体现本次经历后二人的感受。优秀范文Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.Jane,exhaustedandsca
13、red,laydownnearastone,missingherfamilyatadistance.Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldnthelpcrying,HadntIquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandCIimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldntbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinherey
14、es.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.Tohergreatjoy,ahelicopterwasflyingoverheadagainandagain.Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractOthersattention.Fortunately,shewaseventuallynoticedandbroughtintothe
15、helicoDier.There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.Astightlyaspossible,shehuggedhimandwastoothrilledtosayanything.Besides,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain,determiningtolivethelifetothefullest.【解析】首先,在逻辑上,要做到了合理合情:起初,主人公身陷森林,内心充满了悔恨,在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧;之后,主人公努力求生,最终获救,并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵
16、观整个故事,情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求,而且还设置了一定的悬念,增强了故事的可读性。文章第一句anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest中,rule一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法,让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗,同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouse.句中,直接将情绪形容词放在句首,使用了非谓语动词的语法,表达精练。此夕卜,There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.,一句中,使用了几个短
17、句,却包含了两处非谓语动词语法,同时活用了“wear”一词,把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。【词汇拓展】1)表示并列关系的过渡词:and,aswellas,or,Notonly.butalso2)表示转折关系的过渡词:but,yet,however,although,由OUgh3)表示时间关系的过渡词:first,second,third,andthen,finally,after,before,afterafewdays,atlast,atthattime,later,inthepast,immediately,inthemeanwhile,when,while,then,afterthat.