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1、托福作文写作范文详解题目:ThethreepiechartsbelowshowthechangesinannualspendingbyaparticularUKschoolin1981,1991and2001.内容要点因为三个饼图每个版块所描述的对象是一样的,最重要的变化在于每年每个项目所占的百分比,因此三年间每个项目所占百分比的变化是写作重点。教师工资所占比例最大,保险所占比例最小,应重点提出,其余的项目也要进行适当比较,特别是三年中百分比变化比较大的项目需要注意。Thethreepiechartsbelowshowthechangesinannualspendingbyaparticula
2、rUKschoolin1981z1991and2001.(首段概括全表格内容,点明描述对象和具体年份)Inallthreeyears,teachers1salariesalwayshadthelargestproportion,risingto50%in1991andendingat45%in2001.Incontrastinsuranceconstantlyoccupiedthesmallestpercentage,althoughitincreasedfrom2%to8%.Inaddition,otherworkers1salarieskeptdecreasingfrom28%in1981
3、toonly15%in2001.(首先提出占比最大的项目是教师工资,之后比较提出占比例最小的项目是保险,最后分析三年内百分比变化最大的项目-员工工资)Spendingonresourceshadincreasedto20%in1991beforedroppingtoonly9%bytheendoftheperiod.Bycontrast,thecostoffurnitureandequipmentexperiencedanoppositetrend,decreasingtoonly5%in1991zbutrisingsharplyto23%oftotalschoolbudgetin2001.(
4、分析资源消费和家具设备消费的比例变化:前者三年内变化趋势是先升后降,而后者是先降后生,对这种变化进行一定的描述和对比)Allinall,itiscleartoseethatmostoftheschoolexpenditureisspentonteacherssalaries,andtheproportionofinsurancecouldbeseenanupwardtrend.However,lessandlesscostisspentonotherworkerssalaries.(全文总结,重申所有重点内容)满分要素剖析:语言表达本文有很多表示变化趋势的短语,除了increase,decre
5、ase这些学生最常用的,还有risetozexperiencea.trend,riseto等。要加强学习,可用于所有动态图中。1 Precisely,over-grazinghadthelargestproportionwhichoccupies35%.Itiscloselyfollowedbydeforestationandover-cultivation,takingup30%and28%respectively.Inaddition,therearealsosomeotherreasons,constitutingonly7%.注意这三句中运用到的表示占百分比的表达:occupy,tak
6、eupzConstituteo此外,注意罗列几个百分比数时用到的方法:followby,respectively,inadditiono2 However,itonlytookup0.2%inNorthAmericaand1.7%inOceania.本句提到植被减少对北美及大洋洲农业产量影响时,尽量简化句子,不多对百分比的含义多加解释,因为前一句是关于植被减少对欧洲农业产量的影响。逻辑结构本文是典型的总分总结构的小作文。开篇先pamphrase原题,第二部分分两段,分别描述两个图表的细节。最后一句话对两个表格分别进行了高度的文字概括。内容要点此题要求分析双图:饼状图和表格图。重点在于分析饼状图
7、的静态比例分布和表格图的静态比例分配,饼状图的分析顺序按从大到小进行,表格图的最大值最小值是描述的重点(11.3,9.8,O)Theinformationgivenbythepiechartandthetableisaboutthemainreasonsforworldwidelanddegradationandhowthreeareasoftheworldwereaffectedbythereasonsoverthe1990s.(首段概括全表格内容,点明描述对象:全世界范围内土地产量下降的原因及1990年三个区域受影响的程度)Aswecanseefromthepiechartztherear
8、efourmaincausesoffarmlandbecomingdegradedintheworld.Precisely,over-grazinghadthelargestproportionwhichoccupies35%.Itiscloselyfollowedbydeforestationandover-cultivation,takingup30%and28%respectively.Inaddition,therearealsosomeotherreasons,constitutingonly7%.(提出共有四种原因导致土地产量下降,按照比例由大到小的顺序分析四种原因)Thegive
9、ncausesaffecteddifferentregionsdifferentlyinthe1990s.Specifically,inEuropewhichhadthelargestproportionoflanddegradation(23%)z9.8%landdegradedwasduetodeforestation.Howeverzitonlytookup0.2%inNorthAmericaand1.7%inOceania.AsforOceaniawith13%oftotallanddegradation,themostseriouscausewasover-grazing(11.3%
10、).Interestingly,therewasnolinkbetweenitslanddegradationandover-cultivationwhichmade3.3%landdegradedinNorthAmericawhosetotallanddegradedaccountedfor5%.(分析影响欧洲土地产量最重要的原因-植被减少,并比较植被减少对美洲和大洋洲的影响;然后分析影响大洋洲土地产量的最重要原因-过度放牧,提出过度耕种并未对土地产生影响;最后分析影响美洲土地产量的因素)Allinallzitiscleartoseethatover-grazinganddeforestat
11、ionarethemostimportantreasonsforlanddegradation,andthereasonsmentionedaboveplayeddifferentrolesindifferentregionsduringthe1990s.(概括饼图:强调过度放牧和植被减少是影响土地产量的最主要原因;概括表格:指出地区差异)满分要素剖析:语言表达饼图和表格图有很多百分比需要逐一提出,本范文运用不同的表达方式描述这些百分比。用词和句式变化多端。1 Theinformationgivenbythepiechartandthetableisaboutthemainreasonsfor
12、worldwidelanddegradationandhowthreeareasoftheworldwereaffectedbythereasonsoverthe1990s.雅思小作文首段统一对原题进行paraphraseo本句用的句型是:Theinformationgivenby.isabout可以通用到所有小作文中。并运用了两种常见的paraphrase的方法(1词汇和短语的替换agriculturallandbecomeslessproductive替换WOrIdWidelanddegradation,causes替换reasons;(2)将主动句改成被动句。2 Precisely,ov
13、er-grazinghadthelargestproportionwhichoccupies35%.Itiscloselyfollowedbydeforestationandover-cultivation,takingup30%and28%respectively.Inaddition,therearealsosomeotherreasons,constitutingonly7%.注意这三句中运用到的表示占百分比的表达:occupy,takeupzConstituteo此外,注意罗列几个百分比数时用到的方法:followby,respectively,inadditiono3 However,itonlytookup0.2%inNorthAmericaand1.7%inOceania.本句提到植被减少对北美及大洋洲农业产量影响时,尽量简化句子,不多对百分比的含义多加解释,因为前一句是关于植被减少对欧洲农业产量的影响。逻辑结构本文是典型的总分总结构的小作文。开篇先pamphrase原题,第二部分分两段,分别描述两个图表的细节。最后一句话对两个表格分别进行了高度的文字概括。