托福作文写作范文详解nite.docx

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1、托福作文写作范文详解ReadingInthepastcentury,thesteadygrowthofthehumanpopulationandthecorrespondingincreaseinagricultureandpesticideusehavecausedmuchharmtowildlifeintheUnitedStatesbirdsinparticular.Unfortunatelyforbirds,thesetrendsarelikelytocontinue,withtheresultthatthenumberofbirdsintheUnitedStateswillnecess

2、arilydecline.Firstzashumanpopulationsandsettlementscontinuetoexpand,birdsnaturalhabitatswillcontinuetodisappear.Forestszwetlands,andgrasslandswillgivewaytoevermorehomes,malls,andoffices.Asthetraditionalareassuitableforbirdskeepdecreasing,sowillthesizeofthebirdpopulationsthatdependonthosevanishinghab

3、itats.Second,agriculturalactivitiesmustincreasetokeeppacewiththegrowinghumanpopulation.Thegrowthofagriculturewillalsoresultinthefurtherdestructionofbirdhabitatsasmoreandmorewildernessareasareconvertedtoagriculturaluse.Asaresult,birdpopulationsinruralareaswillcontinuetodecline.Third,ashumansettlement

4、sexpandandagricultureincreases,theuseofchemicalpesticideswillalsoincrease.Pesticidesarepoisonsdesignedtokillagriculturalandhomegardenpestszsuchasinsects,butinevitably,pesticidesgetintothewaterandintothefoodchainforbirdswheretheycanharmbirds.Birdsthateatthepoisonedinsectsordrinkcontaminatedwatercandi

5、easaresult,andevenifpesticidesdonotkillbirdsoutright,theycanpreventthemfromreproducingsuccessfully.Sopesticideshavesignificantlycontributedtodeclinesinbirdpopulation,andbecausetherewillcontinuetobeaneedtocontrolagriculturalpestsinthefuture,thisdeclinewillcontinue.ListeningThepassageclamsthattherewil

6、lbefewerandfewerbirdszbuttheargumentsusedtosupportthisclaimareunconvincing.First,itstruethaturbangrowthhasbeenbadforsometypesofbirds,buturbandevelopmentactuallyprovidesbetterandlargerhabitatsforothertypes,somuchsothatcityandsuburbandwellersoftencomplainaboutincreasedbirdspopulationsseagullsatlandfil

7、ls,pigeonsonthestreetsandsoon.Evenbirdslikehawksandfalconscannowbefoundincities,wheretheypreyontheincreasingpopulationsofpigeonsandrodents.Soitsnotgoingtobeastoryofuniformdeclineofbirdpopulationsinthefuture.Somepopulationsmayshrink,butotherswillgrow.Asforagriculture,itstruethatittoowillincreaseinthe

8、future,butnotinthewayassumedbythereadingpassage.Thetruthis,intheUnitedStates,lessandlesslandisbeingusedforagricultureeveryyear.Increasinginagriculturalproductionhaveresultedfromandwillcontinuetoresultfromtheintroductionofnewzmoreproductivevarietiesofcrops.ThesenewcropsproducemorefoodperunitofIandzan

9、dasaresult,there1snoneedtodestroywildernessareas.Andthird,whileitscertainlytruethattraditionalpesticideshavebeendestructivetobirds,itsincorrecttoprojectthishistoryintothefuture.Nowthatpeopleareawareofthepossibleconsequencesoftraditionalpesticides,twochangeshaveoccurred.Firstznewandmuchlesstoxicpesti

10、cideshavebeendeveloped,andthat,simportant.Second,andperhapsmoreimportantlythereisagrowingtrendtodevelopmorepestresistantcrops,cropsthataregeneticallydesignedtobeunattractivetopests.Pestresistantcropsgreatlyreducetheneedforchemicalpesticides.Andbestofallzpestresistantcropsdontharmbirdsatall.一、阅读听力要点概

11、括ReadingPassageMainpoints:Birdsnumberwilldeclineinresultofhumangrowth.Subpoint1:Birds1habitsdisappearsincehumanexpand.Subpoint2:Birdshabitatsdecreasesincefurtheragriculturalactivities.Subpoint3:Useofchemicalpesticideswillincreaseandkillagriculturalthenkillbirds.LectureAttitude:Unconvincing.SubPoint1

12、:Notauniformdeclineforallbirds.(BadforsomezGoodforsome,Seagulls,PigeonszHawks.)SubPoint2:Lesslandisusedforagriculture.(ProductiveCrops.)SubPoint3:Newpesticidesdontharmbirds.(Lesstoxic,Pestresistantcrops.)二、范文逐段赏析Paragraph1ThereadingpassageclaimsthatthenumberofbirdsintheUSwilldefinitelydecline.Yetthe

13、professorarguesthatbirdpopulationswillnotshrinkduetoincreasesinhumanpopulation,agriculture,andpesticideuseasissuggestedbythereadingpassagesauthor.此段功能:(Listeningpassage后文提到用L代替)(Readingpassage后文用R代替)以L的观点为主要观点。先复述R的观点:US的鸟群数量会降低。再确定L的反对逻辑关系。然后说鸟群数量不会随着人类增长而减少。此段结构:开头段非常简练干净,先复述R的观点,然后说L反对R,再列出L的观点。为

14、引出充分的辩论做出了准备。Paragraph2Firstztheprofessorpointsoutthaturbangrowth,whileharmfultosometypesofbirds,canprovidehabitatsformanyothertypes.Asamatteroffactzurbanandsuburbandwellerscomplainfrequentlyabouthavingtoomanybirds.This,however,contradictsthestatementinthereadingpassagethaturbandevelopmentcausesbird

15、stodisappear.此段功能:引出第一个分论点(人类引起的城市扩张对鸟类影响),L中说,虽然扩张影响了一部分鸟类,但是能为其他很多鸟类提供住所。甚至城市人会投诉鸟数量太多了,反对了R中的声明。此段结构:此段为总分结构,先写出L的结论,随后列举证据,最后达到反对R观点的效果。Paragraph3Second,theprofessorexplainsthatagriculturaldevelopmentwontaffectbirdpopulationasthereadingillustrates.Newly-introducedandhighlyproductivecropscontinuo

16、uslycontributetoproductionenhancementandmoreefficientlanduse,makingitunnecessaryforhumanstodestroymorewildernessareas.此段功能:引出第二个分论点,L中教授继续发表观点:农业发展不会影响鸟群数量。然后解释说新型高产作物使得人们不需要更多耕种用地。此段结构:此段还是总分结构。L发表了新观点后,列举证据,最后一句和R中所得结论相反。Paragraph4Thirdzwhileconvincedoftheharmfulnatureofpesticideusetobirds,theprof

17、essordoesnotthinkitwillbeaprobleminthefuture,inthatpeopleareincreasinglyawareofthisproblemandaredevelopinglesstoxicpesticidesandpest-resistantcropsassolutions.此段功能:在第三个论点讨论中。L先表达了反对意见:教授认为在农药使用对鸟类危害的问题上根本不需要担心,未来也没有问题,证据是人们开始用毒性较小的农药和抗虫害的谷物了。此段结构:此段还是总分结构,虽然开头是总结了要讨论的问题,紧跟着的插入语L就表达了观点,随后做出解释和反驳了R的观点。三、范文全篇总评1 .逻辑结构全文遵从总分结构,开头段总结了L和R的观点,利于展开全文反驳基调。随后三段依照3个分论点依次展开。在分论点的论证中,由于R的观点比较绝对,L用了很多反例,很容易的就把R的观点击倒。2 .语言表达全文语句过渡平滑,用词准确而不难,其中可以借鉴的词句有:1 (某观点Bo).Thiszhowever,contradictsthestatement.(M观点A).2 .Shrink:收缩,缩水CompressContractTherehasbeensomeshrinkinourexporttrade.

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